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Earth and Lucia (2132-2218) Anonymous 17/01/20(Fri)02:05 No. 153 ID: 70f084

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In 2132 AD, Earth’s population reached an untold 10 billion, overpopulation and nearly drained resources forced one-third of its people to move away out of the Solar System in cryostasis to reach a new world in 55 Cancri named Lucia. Located in the Constellation of Cancer, this lifelike planet is unlike any other Earth-like destination human colonists ever seen like it, not long after their Alpha Centauri discovery.

Given the technology that far surpasses today’s standards, humans living on Lucia perform much better, build structures of illogical design, and dream better than on Earth. It also comes down with a price. Weather patterns on this mythical world are very dynamic and eerie, more intelligent species, various new diseases that can kill in minutes, and an intergalactic spot for invading forces that come and go from all over the galaxy. The time of day seems to move five times quicker than usual, and their orbital year is as short as Mercury. This may indicate that despite the same gravity, eccentricity, and density, it rotates and orbits too fast around its star, baffling astronomers.

The first war took place in 215x AD; some colonists have disputes over the new resources. They cannot be sure exactly where they want to farm, mine, or grow their own due to the exotic properties that change so fast, scientists were mystified. Then, they started fighting one another for territory, but quickly put down violently.
Then, in 216x AD, a second war took place, this time, social issues with the new species that inhabit there. The Lucians and colonists do not agree each other and felt that their visitors have overstayed. The native inhabitants have far better technology, and the people seem to have similar characteristics of every colonists’ favorite creations, particularly with an interest with Eastern cultures. The colonists’ were driven back and evacuated into slip-space for five decades.

In what would be a coronation event for their matriarch named after the planet itself, it yet struck again in the spring of 2203 AD. The invading force was not colonists, but rather Chasers, monsters invented from peoples’ fears that pursue them in their imaginations. They caused minor damage to the Lucians’ home capital, and casualties estimated in the hundreds, but ended in roughly a quarter-hour with a cease-fire to tell the matriarch’s would-be husband, and everyone else living there to not dream indefinitely in exchange for peace. Anyone that died violently is left to wander the White Desert, home to the Monochrome Tribe south of the capital for all eternity.

In the most unexpected turn of events, in Izanagi Retreat, an insomniac man after many years of hardship, kept the promise to see her again only by dreaming in sleep, or so it seems. The king of the Chaser legions in Yerivia to the northwest, psychologically enthralled at the man’s wish he is about to fulfill, launch a direct all-out attack on the Lucians again in 2217 AD. For six months, both factions clash head-on each other through the harsh desert with everything they had. Inevitably, supplies becomes miniscule and hard to get by without outside help, hundreds of thousands lie dead, affected the nearby forest south of the desert that became a haunted location to remind people of the devastation and the lives that took them.

Having no choice but to relinquish fighting in the western front, the Lucians and Chasers signed a truce, but despite this, they still fight on the border with fewer regiments of all that is left. The matriarch wants to protect the citizenry as a whole by instigating a new program to stop most wanted criminals called LITE (Lucia Intergalactic Tactical Elite). They only train to kill to collect bounties, and act as a private-owned government agency behind the scenes.

As of now, in the early months of 2218 AD, an emergent invading force, the Dormilians, a hybrid vampire race in their own search for immortality, unconditional loyalty, and a penchant for destruction without guilt. By utilizing the power of Lilith to convert anything and anyone into their cause, they will not stop no matter what until every planet in the known galaxy falls into subjugation.

Anonymous 17/01/20(Fri)10:02 No. 155 ID: dabd0b

>In 2132 AD, Earth’s population reached an untold 10 billion
Does that work out mathematically? Barring pandemic disease and global warfare, I think we'll get there a lot sooner.
>this lifelike planet
Lifelike? So it's a fake planet. There goes my suspension-of-disbelief.

>Given the technology that far surpasses today’s standards, humans living on Lucia perform much better, build structures of illogical design, and dream better than on Earth.
What?
>It also comes down with a price.
"comes down to (basic problem)"
"comes with a price"
>an intergalactic spot for invading forces that come and go from all over the galaxy
How? Why? You know what, your explication is so weak I don't even care.
>eccentricity
Orbital eccentricity, or just weirdness like your use of the English language?
>baffling astronomers
Baffling your readers.

That's about as far as I got. My creative writing professor in university would have gutted you and put your guts on display in a museum of modern failure. I'll just say this--you need an editor, and to give that editor broad authority to rewrite your work.

Oh, and why the hell is this in /civ/? You're obviously trying to make the basis for a strategy game here. A strategy game that will suck.

Anonymous 17/01/20(Fri)18:27 No. 156 ID: 70f084

Let me make this clear: It is a dream world, anything can happen there, like other planets we create when we fall asleep, whether we like it or not. As for the planet itself being life-like, humans terraformed it the moment they discovered it, thus awakening the native species by the 2140's.

By the 2100's, we might be able to dream much better than this generation, but because of the instability of the planet humanity can bring, that is where all kinds of extraterrestrial species we don't want to invade a colonized planet, but too late.

The planet makes one year roughly equal to that of Mercury, so the change of seasons does not give humans time to have a consistent schedule, resulting in sleep-deprivation on a grand scale, followed by two wars to the point they have to leave everything behind. We may not see them again until around the 2220's to retake it. This story is a history simulator through a presentation that will turn into a non-profit animation that will be released into the public.

Yes, being a colonist with a job in astronomy on a foreign planet can be a big screw up, because Lucia makes one rotation every 4.8 hours, and completes one year in roughly three months. To make things even scarier, there is no moon, so tides can go much higher in case of earthquakes.

I am a lucid dreamer just like my dream people, and I would undoubtedly challenge you personally inside my dream world, 1-on-1. The only time I was killed comes from my only dream that took place 15 years ago by a Chaser army whilst serving the matriarch as a prince. I may be a good storyteller and listener, but the moment I go fight-or-flight mode, it will be settled only in my dreams. I will protect Lucia, the people, and the matriarch with my life. I am the last line of defense between anything evil and the queen. If I fail in my duty, Lucia will be destroyed in the blink of an eye with everything in it, including you, and your fellow Chaser or Dormilian fiends. I am not afraid of violence, but I must preserve my reputation with my chivalry. Next time you dream, you will encounter me there, waiting patiently to start the duel. If I win, you are kicked out for good.

I just hope this soon-to-be animation series will not attract any more “enemies of the planet”, and it will go smoothly.

Anonymous 17/01/20(Fri)18:44 No. 157 ID: 1a1ca1

>>156
>Let me make this clear
You have a vivid imagination, but no rhetorical skill. For example, "life-like" does not mean what you think it means and cannot be used to mean what you want it to mean. The planet appears to be alive, or (does things) as though it were animate. Feel free to practice all you want, but I seriously recommend you get this shit out of /civ/.

Anonymous 17/01/21(Sat)14:40 No. 161 ID: 70f084

I will leave peacefully to settle all my disputes on lemonparty.org. This map isn't going anywhere, though. I will let the moderator take care of it while I am away, not coming back. I apologize for hurting your comment.

Goodbye.

Anonymous 24/11/29(Fri)11:16 No. 2432 ID: c55b23

Americans scream living in a jail is safe, but living in a prison is extremely dangerous.

In a free world, you can escape starvation, bad economies, dangerous areas, high taxes, and draconian laws.

In a global police state, you cannot run away from cruel guards or dangerous inmates, and you're completely dependent on the government for everything.

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